I have decided to go further with the idea of the people in the room being covered in wires. After I had recieved my feedback I found several ways in which I would be able to improve my idea. I think the main way that I would need to improve this idea is to add more photos to show what I want in this video and also to try and add another aspect to it to make it more interesting.



 I was told that having just the two parts of it wasn't enough. I thought what I could also do was add a dance to it. I think I would have a contempary dance of someone perhaps danceing seeming like she was trying to get out of the wire to symbalise that she was trying to get out of the wires but just as the video went on she would get more and more tied up in them.

I was also given the idea of having the people also wrapped in barbed wire so that they seem trapped in this music and they can't come back. I think this would make the video more compelling.