After having pitched my thriller idea I received mainly feedback on my first idea. This was about the man who is in the woods who then goes on to shoot someone very casually. There were many aspects of the thriller idea that they feel needed to be changed slightly.

One of the biggest differences that people felt needed help with in the scene was how the audience may be unclear on what the person was shooting in the opening scene. I thought that it would be good to leave this up to the audience during the scene and maybe hint that it wasn't a person at the start by showing a shot of a deer in the woods but then at the end there would be a shot of the person that he had shot.

Another way in which the class thought that it could be a good idea was that instead of there being the shooting of one person there could be a shooting of more people and to also make the scene seem more horrible and harrowing they could also have the finishing shot of the person shot and then also have a  shot that would then go down the arm of the person shot and finally there would also be the small hand at the end of it to show that there had also been a child been killed.

There were many other ideas and suggestions for this thriller and one of these was that people at the start may find that this is quite a boring if there was just someone walking at the start. I thought that instead of having a long period at the start of him on the phone we could do it so he was almost at the point at which he has arrived at where he is going to shoot the person or people and then spend longer here and of him assembling the gun which would make it more interesting for the audience.

Another way in which my opening sequence could be changed is by perhaps adding in another character into the scene. This i feel could be done in two ways. One of the characters that could be added could be the person that he is on the phone to and this could work quite well as it would help to show his normallity in contrast to the actions that he is doing. The other person that could be added to the scene could be the man that he is about to shoot but i think this could either help the suspense of the scene but also ruin it and get rid of the suspicion as the audience would know what was coming.

finally one last part of advice that I was given was that it is often not as likely for someone who people want to be assassinated to live in the country and instead that they would more likely be in the city so instead of the person being based in the woods we could then instead do it based in a city. Though doing it in an actual town or city would be difficult so we would have to try and successfully find a way in which we could show it to be in a city or town.